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A number of tertiary courses require students to undertake a period of unpaid work at companies or organisation as part of their programme. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this type of course requirement?

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It is undeniable that working with companies and organisations adds up a lot
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 working without getting paid actually leads to some
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 as well .
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 of
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 working with organisations as a part of
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the course
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 requirement . A fundamental advantage for the
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 can be that they will be having experience
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working with professionals . That gets the ball in
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's court v when he goes for having an actual job in the competitive environment .
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 it would prepare them for
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 about how to handle
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 pressure when you are committed to
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 an organisational goal .
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 , working in an actual organisation
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 up a sense of
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 discipline in every person which is a positive trait in all aspects . There are some
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for
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 working as an unpaid intern .
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 fact Cannot be ignored , that everyone
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 for their share of return whenever they contribute
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 an achievement . So is the scenario here ,
students
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 would expect some return for the
hardwork
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hard work
 done by them .
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 being an unpaid intern
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 will not be paid ,
taht
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 can bring down the
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moral
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 of the individual. And
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 fact cannot be ignored that
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 will have to maintain a balance between their actual studies and the
work
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 . Imbalance in these can affect the grades
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 influencing the academic result . Another thing that
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on
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to the
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 is ,
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 can find it difficult to adjust with the senior working professionals and
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 thing sometimes leads to spoilage of the
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 environment in the organisation and
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 being blamed for the same make him question his own abilities . To sum up , there are both
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sides available the bright and the dark when Talking about
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the unpaid
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internship
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. It depends on the
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 he wants to go
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tertiary courses
  • unpaid internships
  • practical skills
  • work experience
  • networking opportunities
  • organizational culture
  • financial strain
  • exploitation
  • menial tasks
  • career guidance
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