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In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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A majority of
people
 believe that high
salaries
 for employees
bringing
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 many benefits to a
country
, while
other
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others
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 think that the
government
 should
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salaries
 and balance to
people
 can earn. In the following, both
of
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views will be discussed in detail before the conclusion. In
this
 essay, the specific reason will be narrated and
then
 give my own opinion on the matter. To
being
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 with, some
people
 believe that high
salaries
is
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 good for a
country
.
Firstly
, extremely high cost to
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the worker
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worker
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workers
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 will be bringing their passion to work harder. High
salaries
 not only make
employee
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employees
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to
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work hard, but
also
 build accomplishment in
works
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.
Secondly
, Giving high
cost
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 to
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the worker
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worker
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workers
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 can
be encourage
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the economic
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economic
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. Because they have money for living,
and
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they will support
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the economic
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economic
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 by
buy
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a products
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 and
traveling
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.
On the other hand
,
other
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others
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 believe that the authority
such
 as
government
 should control
salaries
.
Moreover
, the
government
 will have more funds to develop public infrastructure, which aid
to
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all
people
 in society.
Also
, it can be unfair to some
people
 who receive a low salary. So, Limiting incomes will bring more equality. In my opinion, I personally agree with
heigh
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high
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 incomes will make high taxes that it
mean
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country
’s wealth. The
government
 can
be spend
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a
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money
to
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on
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 a
country
.
For instance
, Money always circulates within the
country
, keep changing to be better, and developing. In conclusion, regulating
the
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salaries
 is not the solution
for
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to
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 income disparity. It is a key strategy for a
country
 for
further
developing
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development
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.
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