Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. Shat problem can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Undoubtedly, enough sleep is
crucial
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part of our life. In
this
fast pacing life, not getting enough sleep every night has become a pressing issue to most
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people
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.
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essay will discuss the reasons which could seem to be, and
then
put light on the viable solutions to resolve
this
problem.
People
find the
difficulty
to sleep
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night
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, it seems two valid reasons could be.
Firstly
,
people
consider themselves as part of
this
competitive world, they believe they must aware
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is happening in the world,
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it's related to their friends, relatives, celebrities, sports and many more. To satisfy
this
need, they create accounts on various social sites, and at night when they get free time, they keep scrolling. As the result, find
difficulty
in sleep.
Secondly
, they are satisfied with life and work, no doubt, everyday
people
face work
stress
or
other kind
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of, to get rid of the
stress
they keep using their phones and unable to sleep. According to
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study, 89.4% of
the
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people
are finding
difficulty
in sleep to escape from
stress
. The solutions, I believe, could start from the person who is facing
difficulty
in sleep.
First
of all, they should be aware
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sleeping
difficulty
and
then
should willing to put
efforts
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this
.
This
is because
,
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they must know the after consequences of
this
problem for long, it
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our mind, body and soul badly. For
this
, they should
meditation
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in the morning which will help not only to relieve their
stress
but
also
help to heal their whole body.
Secondly
, they could improve their diet as they can avoid drinks that contain caffeine
specially
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during
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the nights
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nights
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. These two solutions
seems
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to be great to alleviate
this
issue. In conclusion, it is acceptable that
people
in
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these days are sufficient from
stress
and finding
difficulty
in sleep.
This
can be eradicated by switching lifestyle to meditation and
healthy
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a healthy
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diet.
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