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Nowadays many people choose to be self employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation .why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantage of being self employed ?

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Most contemporary economies allow
such
 a model of employment as being
self employed
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, which appears very tempting for many .
However
, still the vast majority of
people
 oot for being employed in a company and do not set up their own
business
 .
This
 essay will attempt to look into the key factors as to why
people
 may prefer entrepreneurship and major drawbacks to it . To start with , in many modern societies, including
Russian
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, entrepreneurship is greatly encouraged with lots of
business
 seminars and workshops advertised . These may range from slightly fraudulent to genuinely educational and supportive, and
generally
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 any information on setting up a company is easily accessible for those who are willing. And willing they are, as being a
business
 person , the image itself has a certain feel of luxury and can easily become as wealthy as Steve Jobs is they wish it .
This
first
 reason is linked to the
second
 , which is relevant for Russia and some other countries . Bank loans are accessible too , and they are largely eagerly granted . If a future
business
 person truly knows their
business
 , it poses no threat .
Nevertheless
 , easy access to setting up a company for someone inexperienced or insensible may cause a range of problems . Apparently , the
first
 issue that may perplex
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an unskilled entrepreneur is the necessity to be a jack of all trades . Having taken the responsibilities of an accountant , PR or HR manager at the same time can be a burden and make the person wish they had never it at all . If they hire other
people
 to perform these tasks , they must pay more tax and provide their employees with decent working conditions . At the same time ,
business
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 usually a risky matter and in our
competitve
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competitive
reality
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 many of them go bankrupt . And
last
 , but not least - self-employed
people
 are the only
people
 responsible for their own vacation, sick or maternity leaves or any job perks, So in a nutshell, being our own master has many downsides ,
that is
 why
people
 decide to play it safe .
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