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Illiteracy continues to be a concern for many countries in the world today. What are the causes of illiteracy in the modern world, and what effects does it have on the people concerned and on society as a whole?

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Many
people
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 find
illiteracy
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 as intriguing in
21 st
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the 21st
 century;
however
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, it continues to be a troubling issue for many
countries
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 discuss
main
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 two
causes
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 and two effects.
According to
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illiteracy
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the illiteracy
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 rate remains constant in various
part
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parts
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 of the world.
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 with, in Asian
countries
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, lack of school availability remains the main causing issue. Even though China is considered one of the most populous
countries
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 in the world, there aren’t many
people
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 living in barren regions like Central and West China. Simply, there is no teacher who can teach how to read or write. At the same time, in European
countries
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, the education of
refugee
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 children has been long forgotten. If we have to mention the root of the problem, the main cause of
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refugee
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the refugee
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 movement is nothing else but a war. Apparently,
illiteracy
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 has significant affections including:
inability
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the inability
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 to understand recommendations, advice and instructions,
inability
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the inability
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 to get help from books or reading materials, inability to understand and comprehend all forms of written documents. For
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most
people
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of
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 rural
area
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areas
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 in central and
west
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china
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China
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,
illiteracy
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causes
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 incompetency for jobs and increased
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supervision
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. For example, if the company wanted to run their business, they would have to increase the number of managers or teach the employees basic
necessity
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necessities
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 like reading danger
sign
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signs
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 or other important notes.
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 ultimately
causes
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less
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 jobs and
paying
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 less taxes to the government. If the county can’t make any money, they can’t establish schools.
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, the children who couldn’t learn reading or writing proficiency at a young age, most likely have less
interests
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interest
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 in learning in later ages.
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 explains why, in
Europe
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Europe,
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 so many
refugee
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 adolescents, born in
refugee
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 camps, are not learning to read or write.
To sum up
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,
illiteracy
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 is caused by insufficient schools or teachers and by
refugee
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 movements in some parts of the world.
As a result
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, millions of
people
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 are suffering from reduced opportunities in working fields.
In addition
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,
illiteracy
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 in childhood
causes
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 decreased interest in learning a language
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at
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later ages.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Literacy
  • Illiteracy
  • Poverty
  • Access
  • Educational resources
  • Social inequality
  • Discrimination
  • Gender disparity
  • Racial bias
  • Cultural norms
  • Technological advances
  • Political instability
  • Disruption
  • Education systems
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Job prospects
  • Health implications
  • Self-esteem
  • Empowerment
  • Economic growth
  • Social cohesion
  • Civic participation
  • Democratic processes
  • Exclusion
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