Some people feel that boarding schools (where students or pupils live at the school during the term) are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons. Consider both sides of this debate and reach a conclusion.

Nowadays, the question
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that
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boarding schools are truly a perfect choice for children or
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is not
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still
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unsettled.
This
essay will discuss the debate, and give a concluding view.
Firstly
, those who support boarding
school
claim that
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exceeds
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disadvantages
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. There could be several leads on
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to be more independent, solely
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on the studies and actively
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the privilege of undisrupted time. It may seem logical to think that without any distractions, students
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in both academic and non-academic fields.
On the other hand
, those who oppose
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boarding
school
argue that it brings numerous drawbacks. Namely, neglected time schedule, picking up unhealthy habits and failed supervision. For example, in Mongolian Boarding schools,
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concerning issue is none other than
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usage of recreational
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. The causes are explained as exaggerating
school
subjects, depression and inadequate attention from
school
authorities.
This
may conclude that having to
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up on
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control entirely is not
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brightest advocacy we can insinuate.
However
, it is crucial to mention
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supervision
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the student and ameliorated professional help for the student could
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significant improvement
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the
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drug problems. All in all, it seems advisable that the decision to send the student to the boarding
school
should be based on each
school
’s circumstances,
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ethics rather than on a general view
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“every student” should go to boarding
school
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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