You recently bought a jacket, but when you got home, you discovered it was damaged. When you took it back to the store, you were told that merchandise cannot be returned. Write a letter to the store manager. In your letter Describe the problem with the jacket. Explain what happened when you tried to return it. Say what you would like the manager to do.

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Dear Sir, Hope you are well. I am writing

this

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letter to express my sadness about

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shop from your

store

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. I had bought a

jacket

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, but when I came

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apply

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home

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, I have realized it was damaged very

bad

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. It was impossible to wear. When I was in

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store

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the store

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, I haven'

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controlled the

jacket

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totally.

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, I tried to wear

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it at

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home, I couldn'

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wear it because of

zipper

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the zipper

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is not working. It was broken.

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Also

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there

were

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some white

blemish

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on the arms of the

jacket

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. After I discovered these problems, I went to your

store

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last

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Tuesday. I have talked with your

store

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associate. She told me, because of discounts, we can'

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return any of

products

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the products

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. Though, I couldn'

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return my damaged product. As a being consumer, I request you to change my damaged

jacket

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with

new

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a new

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one. I like your

store

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and I do shop quite often from your

store

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. Nobody can wear

this

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jacket

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with

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current

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its current

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condition. I would be very glad if you change my product. Sincerely, Ezgi Koçak

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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7 paragraphs

175 words

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