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When talking about success, we often think of people who are rich or famous. Suc In your opinion, what are the qualities that characterize a successful person? Why do you think these should be the criteria? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Name and fame
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 measured with the riches one acquires and often famous persons are counted on as successful in
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. In my point of view, it’s not only the money
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 but there are several other qualities which make a man successful like
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hard
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, determination and ability to take risks in
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. Hard
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 undoubtedly is the key to
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 in every walk of
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, all of those who are at the top list of billionaires are hard workers
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, later they got
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 and fame in their lives.
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, if they deviated from their goal achievement in the early stages of their
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 they would have never come out with the flying
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, the ability to face challenges can be presented more vividly by an analysis of successful people all over the world which was published in “The Times” that the most persistent quality of any fortunate person is the ability to do
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 diligently.
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, Bill Gates and Steve Jobs are live examples of
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 phenomenon.
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, if a rich or famous person stops working laboriously, he would be at risk of losing these things. Nothing comes in the way of hard
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 and absolute determination to achieve
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. If the person is passionate and has a never resting desire to reach the target, he can be triumphant. It is the nature of law that fortune smiles on the brave, so those who do not possess
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 quality of being courageous and strength to endure their pursuits
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left
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 behind in the race of
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 and be futile.
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, if Narendra Modi did not have the passion for the country’s wellbeing, he would not have been
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 successful leader India now has.
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, in order to reach the heights, one has to give up procrastination and follow their goals fearlessly. In the nutshell,
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 cannot be measured only with wealth or popularity; it has other standards too, like working hard, determination and courage to get particular goals in
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. So, limiting
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 of
success
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 just to one or two factors is not justified.

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Stick to this essay structure:

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  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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