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Whether or not someone achieves their aims is mostly a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#someone #luck
People
 have different views about what elements contribute the most to a person's success. While I accept that
luck
 helps
people
 to reach their desired target at the same time, I would like to argue how determination and hard
work
 are much more crucial phenomena to accomplish goals. On the one hand,
Luck
 can be an important factor to achieve a target. Some
people
 are fortunate enough to be born into wealthy families. It allows them to have all modern facilities and have better education easily. Those children do not have to put much effort in order to earn money and become successful
people
 in their life.
For instance
, If we take an example of the entertainment industry there are an abundance of new actors coming, some of them debuting from their in-house production company. So it is because they are lucky enough that they are blessed with an inherited actor family.
On the other hand
,
people
 can not rely on
luck
 every time. They have been passionate and focused in order to achieve their dreams.
However
, determination,consistency, sometimes sacrifice and so forth are the key factors behind any successful icon.
For example
, The famous American scientist Thomas Edison is known for hard
work
 and not giving up attitude. We all know his electric bulb invention, so no matter how many failed attempts he has gone through he kept doing that until he was successful in it.
In addition
, there is one family in my neighbourhood who are going through some financial crises so they both have to do two jobs in order to give a better life to their children. To conclude,
although
 I agree that
luck
 is important in helping
people
 to become successful, I believe that hard
work
 and determination are more important elements. So,
work
 hard to make yourself lucky.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diligence
  • consistent effort
  • inherent talent
  • honing skills
  • external factors
  • upbringing
  • social connections
  • economic background
  • right place at the right time
  • contributing factor
  • conjunction
  • success
  • achievements
  • endeavors
  • fortune
  • serendipity
  • determinants
  • efficacy
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