In some Vinhomes areas, fast food, prepared meals, and sugary drinks are now sold in more shops and at lower prices than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

In some
Vinhomes
quarters, fast
food
and sugary
drinks
are now much easier to buy with lower prices than that few years ago.
This
brings about many advantages to
Vinhomes
population.
However
, disadvantages
are
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also
existed.
Firstly
, to say about advantages.
Vinhomes
habitants
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habitats
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will be easier to get their needs. Fast
food
, prepared meals are the most common
kind
of
food
that contain enough nutrients for
people
's
requiments
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requirements
. It will take shorter or no time to prepare. So we can say in short " it is in touch" to everyone in the areas. The following reason, as it is said
that is
much cheaper than in the past. The reason sounds very reasonable to most
people
, not only to
Vinhomes
population. The
habitants
will
spent
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less money on their
food
, they can save some more money
to
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others needs.
However
, fast
food
and
drinks
also
creates
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many disadvantages not only the
Vinhomes
habitants
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habitats
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but
also
other
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people
.
Firstly
, we all know that areas, fast
food
, prepared meals, and sugary
drinks
contains
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contain
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a large amount of saturated fat which may be converted to cholesterol during metabolism inside our body,
that
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which
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may lead to various
kind
of heart diseases.
Secondly
, they
also
contain some
kind
of harmful substances
such
as oxidants and free roots that can metabolise to
the
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apply
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cancers-induced substances . We are all clear that cardiovascular diseases and cancers are the two leading causes of
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the dead
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dead
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for human beings. The
last
, all
people
' needs for foods and
drinks
(
Vinhomes
people
), which is so easy to get, may cause
people
be
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lasier
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easier
. They don't want to go out for other social
relation
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relations
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, they don't want to create more jobs, more
oppotunities
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opportunities
, they just want to stay at home, playing games, watching television, and ordering
food
and
drinks
through the delivery systems (
for example
Grab
food
..) to bring about. In conclusion, in
Vinhomes
areas as well as other new population quarters, there are many
kind
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kinds
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of fast
food
and sugary
drinks
are now sold with cheaper prices may harm the
habitants's
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habitants'
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life.
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