In some Vinhomes areas, fast food, prepared meals, and sugary drinks are now sold in more shops and at lower prices than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
In some
Vinhomes
quarters, fast food
and sugary drinks
are now much easier to buy with lower prices than that few years ago. This
brings about many advantages to Vinhomes
population. However
, disadvantages are
Change to the active voice
also exist
have also existed
also
existed.
Firstly
, to say about advantages. Vinhomes
habitants
will be easier to get their needs. Fast Correct your spelling
habitats
food
, prepared meals are the most common kind
of food
that contain enough nutrients for people
's requiments
. It will take shorter or no time to prepare. So we can say in short " it is in touch" to everyone in the areas. The following reason, as it is said Correct your spelling
requirements
that is
much cheaper than in the past. The reason sounds very reasonable to most people
, not only to Vinhomes
population. The habitants
will spent
less money on their Change the verb form
spend
food
, they can save some more money to
others needs.
Change preposition
for
However
, fast food
and drinks
also
creates
many disadvantages not only the Change the verb form
create
Vinhomes
habitants
but Correct your spelling
habitats
also
other
Change preposition
for other
people
. Firstly
, we all know that areas, fast food
, prepared meals, and sugary drinks
contains
a large amount of saturated fat which may be converted to cholesterol during metabolism inside our body, Change the verb form
contain
that
may lead to various Correct pronoun usage
which
kind
of heart diseases. Secondly
, they also
contain some kind
of harmful substances such
as oxidants and free roots that can metabolise to the
cancers-induced substances . We are all clear that cardiovascular diseases and cancers are the two leading causes of Correct article usage
apply
Add an article
the dead
dead
for human beings. The Replace the word
death
last
, all people
' needs for foods and drinks
(Vinhomes
people
), which is so easy to get, may cause people
be
Add the particle
to be
lasier
. They don't want to go out for other social Correct your spelling
easier
relation
, they don't want to create more jobs, more Fix the agreement mistake
relations
oppotunities
, they just want to stay at home, playing games, watching television, and ordering Correct your spelling
opportunities
food
and drinks
through the delivery systems (for example
Grab food
..) to bring about.
In conclusion, in Vinhomes
areas as well as other new population quarters, there are many kind
of fast Change to a plural noun
kinds
food
and sugary drinks
are now sold with cheaper prices may harm the habitants's
life.Remove the s
habitants'
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