Each year, the crime rate increases. What do you think are the causes of crime? How can we deal with those causes?

Year
by
year
crime cases are
increaseing
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increasing
in the world, which is
big
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a big
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problem for all
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countries
. There are many reasons behind raising
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number
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of
crimes
. We should find out
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solution
for
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stop
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crime .
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main reason behind
crimes
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rules
not
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are not
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strictly applied by
police
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the police
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.
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may be careless or
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not
senciar
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scar
senior
for their
work
. When any complaint register in
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station
may be
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they not take it seriously or not take
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immediately
and strict action against
criminal
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the criminal
a criminal
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. Lack of
time
and not
work
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with
responsibilty
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responsibility
makes
criminal
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criminals
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fearless . They take benefit from
this
and take more
time
to
work
according to their plan.
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main reason is, Many times seniors or political
leader
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involved
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in
crimes
so in that
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situation
seniors and leaders have power so they
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do not
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want to
work
properly
to
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others and make pressure
for
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other cases so
police
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the police
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cannot concentrate on that
case
. There have
also
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for cases like discuss above situations . Government can make strict rules for
police
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register
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any complaint
police
have to take
immedate
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immediate
and strict action and
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in
limited
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time
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they have to give
report
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a report
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to their senior . If
police
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do not
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not
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gives
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any information to their
senior
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in
limited
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time
they should
punished
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for that lack of
time
and
careless
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to their
work
. And for
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cause
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in
above
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paragraph government should make any type of act or rules so the political leaders or
senior
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seniors
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cannot involve in that
case
or for any
case
make team and do not give any other
case
so they can concentrate on
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particular
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case
. In conclusion, there are many reasons behind
number
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a number
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of criminal
case
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cases
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rising
year
by
year
but there have
also
solutions
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been solutions
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to stop or reduce
crimes
. if government or
police
work
seriously.
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