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Some are of the opinion that people are naturally born as good leaders while others feel that leadership skills can be learned. Discuss both views .

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Communities have needed leaders for centuries. Many people think that the leadership features cannot earn later.
However
, many people argue that a
person
 who wants to be a leader to society, she or
he
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may be a successful head.
First
 of all, in the
last
 centuries, countries managed by kings and queens, etc. Unfortunately, history showed us
this
 management type brought lots of issues for many years. In
this
 management type, a
person
 who is a king's son would be a new leader after his father died. Because it was believed that the kings' son had unique leadership skills. When a king's son be a new king, it was thought he has already to be a king naturally.
However
,
this
 idea is not totally true.
For instance
, Ottoman Empire was managed by the reigning system very long term but
this
 empire was abolished because of their king called Padishah.
On the other hand
, the character of a
person
 is definitely an important thing being president.
In addition
, characters cannot be changed. Every
person
 has different minds and ideas. Some of the qualifications can be earned by education but some of them cannot.
For instance
, courage and foresight do not exist in every
person
. To sum up, both sides are right with their arguments. If a community needs a strong leader, the
person
 who wants to take
this
 responsible must have enough knowledge and strong courage.
In addition
, all countries should transition into a democratic election system.
Therefore
, the countries can develop themselves.
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