2019-12-07: Task 1 You went on a trip and found that the guide was really helpful. Write a letter to the tour company manager. In your letter, you should: •describe the tour •tell what you liked about the tour guide •recommend manager ways/methods to appreciate the tour guide
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing
this
letter to inform you about my recent experience on a guided ATV trip. As you might already know there are two trips, one for skilled drivers and one for beginners. The trip is a total of 5 miles which includes a short hike to the waterfall. Initially
, I was assigned to the beginner group as this
was my first time riding the vehicle.
My favourite part of this
trip will be the hike to the waterfall because the path to the falls is not paved by humans but by bears who reside in Alaska. Moreover
, our guide Sam was amazing as he gave us great tips for driving on complicated paths with tree barks and also
in flowing water. He also
recorded videos.
However
, I had a small suggestion for evaluating the skills of a starter or advanced driver. I enjoyed being with a senior group with my skills rather than the junior group. It would be nice if this
segmentation was done correctly.
Yours Sincerely,
Sheba Kota.Submitted by praneeth2094 on
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Development of ideas
To further enhance your letter, consider adding more specific details about the guide's actions that made your experience memorable. It will enrich your narrative significantly.
Paragraphing
In terms of organization, make each paragraph focus on a single topic for enhanced clarity. You've done well, but even clearer separations could make the letter more impactful.
Detail and description
Your letter received high praise for the detail provided about the tour and the guide, painting a vivid picture for the reader.
Tone
The polite and respectful tone throughout your letter was particularly well-received, effectively conveying both appreciation and suggestions.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite