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Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views, and give your opinion.

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Few believe
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 in University or college leads to a successful
career
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, apart from them some students quit their
studies
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 soon after completing the schooling to get a job. In my point of view,
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 believe that graduation is necessary for a successful
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 and to stand independently. Nowadays, graduation is the primary requirement, to achieve technical and qualified Jobs. In order to get respectable pay, a person needs to have good qualifications. Keeping in mind people believe that college
studies
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 definitely improve their
career
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. Let us take, to become a teacher, or to become a Doctor, they need be graduated. Alternatively, these days
Education
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 became commercial, some students are not in a position to opt for higher
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,
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 they break their
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 after school and find the jobs which are relevant to them, like assistants, technicians, etc. To conclude,
education
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 always encourages, enlighten the student
career
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 in the right path, studying beyond school will
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 improve their financial position. Though for certain students it's hard to complete their higher
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, for sure the time spent on completing their graduation will earn them a good life.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Academic qualifications
  • Specialized skills
  • In-depth knowledge
  • Personal growth
  • Social development
  • Practical experience
  • Financial independence
  • Career progression
  • Professional networking
  • Education
  • Work experience
  • Successful career
  • Personal interests
  • Career goals
  • Decision-making process
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