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In the past, lectures were the traditional method of teaching large numbers of students. Nowadays, new technology is increasingly being used to teach students. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this new approach in teaching?

#lectures #method #numbers #students #technology #approach
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today's
today
todays
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,todays
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 modern time rather than teaching theory by
teacher
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the teacher
a teacher
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,
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apply
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 used technology and teach the
students
 by
animations
 or with other modern methods . I
thik
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think
 it is a positive
developement
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development
 . On the one hand, who are saying it has not any advantage, they argue that it
require
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 high investments so schools or any type of other institutes
thye
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the
 investment collect from the
students
 by huge
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 in fees . Which is
financial
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a financial
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burdan
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burden
 for their parents, especially for
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 are belongs
from
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poor
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a poor
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family
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. Apart from
this
, mostly used technology which
are
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 used for study purpose can bad effect on our eyes and
also
 feel tired to student`s mind early because screen or projector are used to show them
animations
 or other videos to teach them which required more attention or power of eyes .
On the other hand
, I am with those who think it is a positive
devolpment
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development
 for learners . Because by using
animations
students
 can understand more
accuratly
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accurately
 than teach theory by
teacher
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the teacher
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 .
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:- Suppose that if any teacher
want
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 to teach them how our planets move around
sun
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the sun
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 and how
change
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 day or night wethers on our earth
than
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then
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 they cannot teach them properly and it
take
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 much time to draw
diagram
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a diagram
the diagram
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 . But if they are teaching them by
animations
 on projectors or big screens
than
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then
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 it
take
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 less time or
students
 can easily understand
whole
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 system . In conclusion, there are some demerits but by using the technology make study more intrusting, easy and improve quality hides its negative
affects
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effects
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