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Nowadays, face to face communication has decreased because it has come under the influence of social media such as Facebook, Telegram, Twitter,or Instagram. Do the benefits of this advancement outweigh its drawbacks?

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 recent decades have witnessed a growth in replacing daily direct
communication
 with social
media
such
 as Facebook, Twitter and Instagram. In my opinion,
this
 trend would do more harm than good.
This
 ubiquitous tool with pervasive influence in our era has two obvious positive impacts on
people
's life.
To begin
 with, social
media
 provides an opportunity for
people
 to communicate instantly across a great distance.
That is
, creating the likelihood of
communication
 in the shortest possible time, social
media
 generate a chance for
people
 so as not to waste their precious time on daily commutes. Take CEOs who get involved in numerous tasks as an example; social networking sites
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 managers to hold one-to-one online meetings in order to evaluate employees' performance.
Moreover
, social
media
, as a state-of-the-art means of
communication
, has mitigated negative effects on
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. By declining the number of vehicles on the roads
as a result
 of staying
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 through the Internet, traffic congestion would dramatically decrease and air quality would considerably improve.
However
, the drawbacks are by no means insignificant. The main downside is that the overuse of social
media
 has degraded the quality of interpersonal relationships, especially at home. Since many
people
 are addicted to social networking sites and always stare at their screens, they fail to pay actual attention to the
people
 around them. Take teenagers who keep themselves occupied in the hours after school as an example; online communicating puts them in a nonverbal disabled context
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 their vocal reactions are invisible. As well as
this
, social
media
 is believed to be responsible for
people
's loneliness. Numerous articles have referred to which there is a strong association between the amount of time spent on Facebook with symptoms of depression. To conclude,
although
 there are a number of advantages when it comes to
communication
 by a click, I personally believe that the disadvantages are far more. Replacement of eye-to-eye
communication
 with social
media
 causes not only to ruin interpersonal relationships but
also
 to make
people
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lonelier.
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