In education and employment, some people work harder than others. Why do some people work harder? Is it always a good thing to work hard?

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humans think that hard
work
is essential in studies and
work
.  Dedicated working is required to ace in the employment or in
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education
.
However
, it should not be the whole
life
of a person. It is generally believed that doing a perfect job with dedication is one of the
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that can lead a person to greater heights in his career. Simultaneously when it comes to academic
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same thinking is applied. People are motivated by these facts and think it is the only way to ace in their
work
and studies. Doing hard
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studying hard aiming
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promotion or targeting future exams can be taken as
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life
scenarios. Having said so, we have noticed that when a person only
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of his
work
, there will be little or no time for him to enjoy his
life
or time for his family. As
such
, giving 100% to education has
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outcomes who will not get a chance to move on with
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failure
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life
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among the direct reasons or examples of a negative impact being too much attached to
work
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, students who had been in books for too long are finding it difficult to
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cope up
cope
with society and often having issues in handling relationships. In
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conclusion
, It is vital that people should take their job/
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education
seriously, but
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should
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manage it properly to lead a peaceful and balanced
life
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Genetic predisposition
  • Work ethic
  • Upbringing
  • Cultural values
  • Ambitions
  • Motivated
  • Fear of failure
  • Competitive nature
  • Overworking
  • Burnout
  • Stress-related health issues
  • Productivity
  • Quality of life
  • Healthy balance
  • Long-term productivity
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