Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for, and allow their children to do whatever they want. Is this a good way to raise children? What consequences could this style of parenting have for children as they get older?

Certain
parents
in modern days
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too much permissive as they tolerate
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whatever
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their
kids
do and often
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them everything they ask for.
This
essay will discuss and explore the
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of
such
kind of
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the
children
as they grow up. Driven by the motive of that I should be the best
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father
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or mother in the world, some
parents
try to provide
what ever
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whatever
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things
demaded
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demanded
by their
children
whithout
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without
any hesitation or limits. They believe
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buying materialistic
things
such
as toys and providing unlimited freedom, can keep the
kids
happy
throught
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throughout
through
their
life
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. Some do it because they do not want to hurt the feelings of their
children
even if they are being so stubborn. In both scenarios it is evidenced that the
parents
had been permissive and
tolerative
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tolerant
with
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regards
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to
rasing
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raising
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their
kids
. How
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this
could
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affect the youngsters when they grow up in their
life
? Unlimited freedom and tolerance may lead them to many unnecessary issues that can ruin their
life
in many ways. When
children
turn into teens/adults they will not understand the impact of not having
things
in
life
as they had never experienced
such
things
in their
life
.
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they will be more vulnerable in
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society as they never used to be restricted or rejected. In
conclution
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conclusion
, it was noticed that
parents
being more permissive and
tolerative
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tolerating
towards their
kids
have many negative consequences rather than
its
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apply
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positive influences as the
children
grow older.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • indulgent
  • entitlement
  • discipline
  • responsibility
  • nurturing
  • self-reliance
  • adversity
  • autonomy
  • validation
  • dependence
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