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Nowadays it is more important to plant trees in open spaces in towns and cities than building houses. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the modern days, environmental crisis becoming more and more obvious. While forests are being cut down, and carbon dioxide emissions only grow,
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 of global warming rising significantly. It is agreed that it is more important to plant trees in towns and
cities
 than building houses. Analyzing how overcrowded
cities
 affects
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 situation will prove it.
Firstly
, climate change now is one of the most pressing world problems, and deforestation
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 a large part in it.
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, Brazilian rainforests are being destroyed due to logging, unsustainable agriculture and cattle farming.
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, planting new trees is an effective way to reduce CO2 as well as create
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 ecosystem.
In addition
, urban greening might help improve air quality and cool
cities
 on hot summer days, not to mention that green streets and rain gardens are pleasing to the eye.
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developed countries urban areas frequently
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 from overpopulation.
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 of Europeans live in
cities
. Building apartments without building good infrastructure will only make residents suffer from traffic, heat and air pollution. The high density of roads and buildings
further
 increase these effects.
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 not
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 important thing to build in today towns. To summarize, eco-friendly design with green infrastructure is
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 actual topic today
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 new living quarters. I agree with the trend of ecological urbanism, which has led to green spaces being featured more prominently in urban planning. While urban greening might have once meant nothing more than parks and tree-lined streets, it now includes a wide variety of beautiful and creative installations.
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