Investment in local amenities such as leisure centres is the best way for the government to foster a good community spirit. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

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amenities
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as a good way for the government to foster a communicate spirit.
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like parks, stadium or library, those place can make
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and allows for the
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make new
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and connect with old
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. From my perspective, I agree with
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leisure
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amenities
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are very important for
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leisure
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amenities
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bring
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date with old
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and to meet new
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in the library or walk the dog in the park together.
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leisure
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canter can provide a wide range of
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such
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as dancing class, swimming class or language class. So, all activities can
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stronger
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spirit.
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in local
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not
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the only way to foster
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spirit. The government can
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some outdoor
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and look for volunteers to
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the public good, like clear up the street or go to care for old
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nearby. The other effective strategy is The Government can
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for their
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more feel together. As a consequence,
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is a very good strategy for
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • ammunities
  • leisure centre
  • sense of togetherness
  • boost the local economy
  • inclusive events
  • diverse range
  • instil a sense of pride
  • shared identity
  • accessibility and connectivity
  • public green spaces
  • community bonding
  • frequent community service projects
  • community-based educational programs
  • promotes physical health
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