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In order to solve traffic problems,governments should tax private car owner heavily and use the money to improve public transportation .what are advantages and disadvantages of such a solution.

#traffic #governments #tax #car #owner #money #transportation
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 suggested that vehicle owners should pay
huge
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amount
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 of money as
a
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apply
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taxes and
to
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utilize that money in the
infrastructre
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infrastructure
,
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so that the traffic issues could be reduced. While
this
 could have some advantages in terms of reducing the number of cars on the street,
consecuently
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consequently
,reducing the emissions that are harming the environment,
also
, enhancing
puplic
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public
 transport,which could save people so much time and money,
however
,there are significant drawbacks that should be taken into consideration,
for example
,
car related
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 businesses,
One
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 the one hand,having a good and reliable transportation system will reduce people need
to
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 cars,
in other words
,if
a an
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 employee could use,
for instance
, a public bus with cheap ticket cost and
didecated
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dedicated
 bus lane that has no traffic,
also
 to get to his work
One
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 the other hand,
car
delars
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dealers
,gas stations,
car
washers
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washes
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,and mechanics will no longer have customers to work with,
as a result
,a big portion of the workers will
ge
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be
get
relased
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released
related
,and some companies might
entirly
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entirely
 close In conclusion,
rasing
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raising
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car
 prices could help
solving
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traffic
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the traffic
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 issue,
however
,
this
 will harm a
lot
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companys
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companies
 that are reliant on cars and
lot
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a lot
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 of people might lose their jobs.
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