some people believe that parents should be responsible for encouraging their children to take regular exercise . others argue that the main responsibility for encouraging children to do so should lie with school . Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
These days because of focusing only on learning at schools and spending too much time on electronic devices so . other people argue that
parents
have to be responsible for encouraging their offspring to take a regular lessons
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regular lessons
a regular lesson
while
believing that the majority accountability for promotion heir
to do so should lie whit
schools.I will discuss both perspectives and give my own idea
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with
To begin
with , it is generally believed that parents
have more opportunities to share time whit
their offspring and teach Correct your spelling
with
their
good habits . In many ,cases Correct pronoun usage
them
parents'
consider a Change noun form
parents
roll
module for their Correct your spelling
role
heir
if the parents'
do what and Change noun form
parents
also
the kid will also
repeat Or perform. ,Moreover
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Moreover,
parents'
have many tools to motivate and encourage their inheritor than the university. Change noun form
parents
For example
at home father can tell his youth if the youngster will do physical exercises or participate a
variety of Change preposition
in a
compilations
related to the sport the father will buy a phone or bicycle and others. if the juvenile does not with these requirements Correct your spelling
competitions
parents'
may be punished and may even use force and Change noun form
parents
hall
has no right to beat Capitalize word
Hall
scion
and there is no or it can be said that less opportunity to promote Capitalize word
Scion
successor
. In ,addition every pair of Correct article usage
a successor
parents'
usually Change noun form
parents
have
one or two scions which means they can give enough care and attention to their offspring's health Correct subject-verb agreement
has
while
it is impossible at a faculty with thousands of students.
On the other ,hand not all parents
' are available to spend too much time with their offspring and have enough knowledge and test for kids. To cite another example if the inheritor wants to play football and he does not know the technique to how to play and she is that is
not an expert but the physical education teachers who teach at the academy know home teaches the heir
to play or do exercises correctly. There are no conditions for the beneficiary to do some exercises at home and the department has a gym and tools. ,Furthermore
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Furthermore,
heir
usually find it easier to keep discipline at the seminary and sometimes are enthusiastic to take task
with their friends.
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To sum up
I firmly believe that this
is both schools' and parents
' responsibility to encourage offspring to take
activity regularly because it can give them more motivation and conditions to keep healthyVerb problem
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Introduction and Conclusion
Ensure that your introduction clearly presents the topic and your opinion. Also, make sure to summarize your main points in the conclusion.
Examples
Try to provide more specific and relevant examples to support your arguments. Make sure each example directly relates to the point you are making.
Discussion of Perspectives
You provide a balanced discussion of both perspectives on the topic
Supporting Arguments
Your arguments are supported with reasonable explanations and examples
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.