Advancement in transportation has enabled people to travel extensively. Does travel helps to promote understanding and communication between two countries?

In
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fast-moving world, migration plays an indispensable role in everyone’s life. Travelling has become very easy for individuals because of improvements in the transport system. Some segments of society reckon that travelling support
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the connections between
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the two
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nations.
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there are arguments on both sides,
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my own
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I agree with
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statement. Even these beliefs will be discussed in support of my personal stance in the following paragraphs. To embark on, there is no doubt that in those days advanced
transportations
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transportation
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such
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as bullet trains, flights and trams
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easy
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it easy
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to migrate from one place to another
place
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as it was intricate a decade ago. Individuals visit
others
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places for various reasons, ranging from business meetings, weddings or parties, higher studies
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as a visitor.
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, people can have opportunities to know different kinds of persons, various religions,
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and several
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languages. The better
transportation
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, the more migration it is. Are there any other benefits attributed to
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situation? Certainly, there are. Upgraded modes of transport
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not only help in the business field but
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also
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are also
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it is essential in education. Many
businesspersons
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businesspeople
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visit other nations and expand their
works
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work
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.
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, Ambani has become the richest person in India because he linked his field with multinational
organizations
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. Apart from
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that,
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nowadays overseas education has become very popular among youngsters because of the quality of study and the way of teaching techniques. If students enrol for their higher
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studies
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in foreign universities or colleges, they would get jobs in a number of reputed companies with an enormous salary. To
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corroborate the above view, an article published in ‘The Times’
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stated that in
2020
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2020,
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seventy per cent of students
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migrated to Canada for
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further
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study. In conclusion, travelling is one of the necessary aspects to bring two different regions together
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the government should
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endless efforts to improve transport.
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, owing to increasing advancements in transportation, it
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more convenient and comfortable for society to migrate anywhere in the world.

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language
Work on the grammar and use simple words more. Make each sentence clear and not long.
coherence
Use good link words to connect ideas: first, also, in addition, in conclusion.
structure
Keep to one idea per paragraph. Start with the main idea and then give a simple example.
content
Check facts like big claims; make sure examples fit the idea.
idea
The idea that travel can link far places is clear.
structure
Intro and end show the writer’s view and choice.

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