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Nowadays, many people change jobs quite regularly, rather than working in the one company for their entire careers. Why do you think this is happening? How can companies keep their workers?

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It is argued that a lot of citizens are deciding to switch their jobs often. The current trend shows that
people
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 don't want to spend their entire life in one job. I emphatically agree with that statement because
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 want to be more experienced in a variety of industries but
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 I think that it's caused by the
generation
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 changes. Nowadays, many
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 tend to change their jobs quite regularly.
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 is because they want to experience different aspects of engaging in other companies. It may be caused because of
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 newest standard of modern employees which is considered to be multi-functional and experienced in many job sectors.
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, my friend Adam is an IT programmer but his duties are not only focused
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 the computer section.
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, he has to be skilled and have abilities to arrange team meetings and
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 he has to be a good team leader which requires skills in leadership. Presently, most of the
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 who tend to change their jobs are definitely those from the newer
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.
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 is because back in the days older society did not have that amount of opportunities
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as we are getting right now. To clarify, the airport transport wasn't developed as it is currently.
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, elders didn't have a chance to apply for a
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job jobs
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 that
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generation
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 seems to be more flexible and pointed into the diversity of career.
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, my friend Artur has been working in many sectors like construction or finance and he graduated
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 college in different sectors. In my ,opinion to keep employees in the
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company
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 it's crucial to ensure his growth and satisfaction and funds to live proudly.
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, it would be a big challenge for the
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employer
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 to keep him inside the business. In Conclusion,
people
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 decide to change their career more frequently to be more experienced. I strongly believe in that statement and I think it is
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 related to the
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 changes. In my view, these futuristic transformations will be beneficial in the development of ourselves.
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