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success is something which most people try to archive what can success mean to different people ,what is your view of success

#success #people #archive
The way in which how
people
 think about their
success
 in contemporary society has become a topic of discussion among
people
.It is true that with the advancement of state of art technology education plays an integral role in human evolution.
However
,a significant proportion of
people
are
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view
that
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success
is
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as
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 collecting lots of money.In my point of view,
success
 is certainly something which means different things to different
people
.I am inclined to believe that being happy implies
success
 in life.
To begin
 with,it is critical to realize
fact
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 that each person carries a hidden potential
that is
 unique to him or her.There is no doubt the fact that the person who can identify their uniqueness,him or her can find
their
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happiness easily.It may carry a significant value in climbing up their career ladder.in a conventional social system
in particular
.
In addition
,the difference between each category is the number of individuals involved in the goal.The social profile helps someone
archive
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 some good knowledge and develop qualities.
For instance
,a successful teacher depends on the number of students who pass their exams excellently.
Hence
, self-achievement varies by the occupation they belong to.
Therefore
, everyone is placing their targets on moving forward whether it is for individual or social development. In conclusion,
success
 is a combination of upward and downward flows in one's direction
is
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measure
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the
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 level of perseverance and patience of each individual. In spite of having trouble and ,obstacles an individual cannot put an end to struggle and
have
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 to find a path to overcome a situation and attain achievement.
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task response
Ensure all points are directly related to the topic of success and its varying definitions among people. Provide more depth and clarity in discussing the different perspectives on success.
coherence cohesion
Make sure there is a clear introduction that introduces the main ideas and a conclusion that summarizes the key points. Work on connecting ideas more smoothly within paragraphs using appropriate linking words and phrases.
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