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Some people think that teachers should be responsible for teaching students to judge what is right and what is wrong, so that they can behave. Others say that teachers should only teach students academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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It is often debated whether
teachers
 in schools should be held responsible for teaching students right from wrong.
School
 is considered a child's
second
 home.
Moreover
, given the
amount
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 of time children spend at
school
, they are heavily influenced by the ideologies taught during their time there.
Hence
teachers
 are in a better position to help students understand and distinguish right from wrong and shape their behaviour as individuals. Especially when a child has working parents, it is difficult to establish a single role model. A teacher can help
such
 pupils make morally valuable decisions in life.
For instance
, many schools have started to teach a special subject on Moral Science which focuses on real-life situations and ethical dilemmas surrounding them.
On the other hand
, the definition of a
school
 is an institution for knowledge and many people believe that behavioural management does not necessarily constitute "knowledge".
Such
 characteristics are part of a person's upbringing and the parents are solely responsible.
For instance
; one
such
 public
school
 teacher made a remark saying that "
Teachers
 are not babysitters".Proponents of
this
 opinion
also
 say that blindly following a teacher's advice can result in loss of individuality and the ability to make one's own decisions. In my opinion, students spend a bulk of their time with their
teachers
 from a very early age and are bound to look for guidance from the
teachers
.
Hence
 they are indeed the caretakers and are
thus
 responsible for shaping behaviours.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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