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Some people think studying from the past offers no benefits to today’s life, while others believe history is a valuable source of information for us. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some individuals commented that past information does not contribute to nowadays' living.
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, others argue that the ancient experience has the relevant teaching to us these days. Personally, I advocate the second view opposing
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the first since history guides us to the future.
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 it has its downsides.
This
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 essay will shed light on both sides of the statement and provide evidence to prove the arguments. On the one hand, human beings use past material as
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 guideline
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 the present and the future.
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,
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 experience is vital for
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 decisions necessary to be made today and tomorrow.
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, if a researcher wants to decide the best chemical compound to be used on a new sort of disease, he will undoubtedly search for other
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 deeds of other scientists rather than following his instincts.
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, his findings are accurate and precise.
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, it is the best outlet for pharmaceutical discoveries. On
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 hand, on some occasions, history leads to some inaccuracies. Because of the high level of trust in some data
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many fail to address properly some situations. The investigating team of the recent pandemic failed to admit the mutation of the virus since they acknowledged from the past century that the influenza virus does not mutate to exemplify.
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, it delayed the fabrication of the vaccine as human beings continued dying for the new variant.
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, it is the overriding reason for the shortfall in medical advancement in some
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 as malaria and cancer. In conclusion, notwithstanding some drawbacks, past
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results
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 in it being the best source for vital
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 in medicinal investigations and
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fields of knowledge.
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, I am still in favour of the use of ancient experiences for
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 of people's development. I recommend
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 world-ruling power
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 the history for the next generation's use.

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task response
Ensure to fully address all parts of the essay prompt. Make sure to discuss both views evenly and provide your opinion clearly at the end. Avoid repetitive phrases and sentences for a more concise response.
coherence and cohesion
Work on creating a clearer structure for your essay. Consider organizing your ideas into paragraphs with clear topic sentences. Use transition words and phrases to connect your ideas more smoothly.
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