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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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 only in the company, because of the
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freedom for choosing
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 of business development and
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 to earn more money without any limits.
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vacation time, especially for people who recently started
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 business. It is hard to set the limit of your working time when you are self-employed, because usually when you
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 phrase: “If you don’t risk, you are not drinking champagne”.
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 should have a strategy and if you don’t, better to
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 for a company, it can save health and money for treatment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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