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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

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The given maps illustrate the layout of a public
park
 named Grange
Park
 when it
initially
 opened in 1920 and how it looks today. Overall, it is clearly seen from the latest map that Grange
Park
 went through a lot of changes since 1920, especially how some natural features are replaced by up-to-date facilities. It is apparent that the two entrances, one at Eldon Street and another one at Arnold Street, have remained unchanged since 1920.
However
, there was an addition of an underground
park
 where people can easily enter from Eldon Street to the right side of the
park
. Entering from Eldon Street’s entrance, at the centre of the
park
, you will see the rose garden surrounding with plenty of seats that used to be a fountain in the past. To your right, there was once a glasshouse with some seats
next
 to it, which is now replaced by the water feature. The seats that were placed at the side to the corner of both entrances have been removed except the rose garden
next
 to Arnold Avenue’s entrance.
This
then
 leaves the
park
 more space. On the opposite side at the upper right corner, there were once a rose garden and a pond for water plants, which have now been replaced by a café and a new children’s play area.
Furthermore
, the stage for musicians has been reconstructed into the Amphitheatre for concerts.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recreational facilities
  • landscaping
  • naturalistic
  • amenities
  • formal gardens
  • ergonomic
  • symmetric designs
  • inclusive
  • accessible
  • accommodations
  • native plant species
  • societal changes
  • visitor services
  • community events
  • evolution
  • modern playgrounds
  • wildflower meadows
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