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Some people view giving presents as an important way to show care to family and friends. Others think there are more important things that can be done to show care and appreciation. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Giving
gifts
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 to
others
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 has been becoming a trend among everyone.
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, few masses consider that giving presents as the best method to reveal the affection and
care
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 labour them but
others
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 argue that there are other ways
also
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 to
show
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care
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 so I will discuss both views along with my perspective.
To begin
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 with the
first
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 notion, by giving
gifts
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 , people can
show
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 their love and
care
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 about them as expensive presents good way to give importance to someone, they can think that they are important for them so they give us expensive
gifts
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such
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 as mobile phones , accessories in gold , cars and bikes .
Additionally
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, when anybody gives
gifts
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 to someone
then
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 they can feel overwhelmed and precious.
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- in flowers , roses are more given to
others
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 as a present as they are the symbol of love in red colour.
Furthermore
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 with the
second
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 notion,
instead
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 of giving presents, there are many other ways through that individuals can
show
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 their affection and
care
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 about them
firstly
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 everyone knows that no one gift is precious than gifting their time to
others
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 in difficult situations as well giving money when they have need .
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, in the epidemic of the corona, many people do not have money to take
care
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 of themselves so rich people should give money to them as showing their
care
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 towards
others
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 as well as utilised time with
others
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 in different activities. According to me, even though
gifts
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 play an indispensable role in a human's life they should do other activities to
show
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care
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 about
others
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such
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 as spending time , playing games , studying together and many more through
others
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 can feel happy .
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