In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care.

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In
Britian
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Britain
, the majority of elder
people
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live in a
common place
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named an old age home where nurses and
medicine
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staff look after them. There is an opinion that the
government
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should take expenses for
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care because
people
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have paid a lot of their
taxes
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for
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privilage
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privilege
and it seems fair. I accept
this
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point of view and think that the elderly should have an opportunity to live in places like these
by
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the
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government
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support.
Britian
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Britain
Britain's
economy has a significant part of
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budget
by
rezidents’
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residents
taxes
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, and the more
people
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’s salary, the more
taxes
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they should pay. Logically, an
eldery
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elderly
person has no
resource
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to continue working so after many years, the
government
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should provide the living in home-cares. The problem is that
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elderly
eldery
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outnumbers
working class
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people
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.
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, the
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gets less money and there is no opportunity to provide excellent care service. I think that a long term budget plan is needed
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that
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is why economic reforms should be carried out for
proper
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distribution of
taxes
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.
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some
people
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think about their future in advance and set up a provident fund which can help
to
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live with dignity in a pension period.
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, if an
eldery
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elderly
person cannot carry about themselves, the
responsobility
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responsibility
leaves under the family. Sufficient care and attention
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are
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often exhausting in a long distance, and
that is
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a problem for dysfunctional families because of their poor financial state.
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, the
government
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should consider a wide range of factors for providing help for a specific case of giving financial support for aged
people
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. In conclusion, if the
government
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controls citizens’ finances and makes the rules which influence the quality of the
people
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’s
life
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lives
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,
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the authorities are primarily responsible for providing high quality for aged
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. There is no doubt that it is normal for developed countries like Britain.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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