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Traditional medicine is more benefits than modern medicine

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Acupuncture for stomach disease just
need
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 to pay between five dollars until ten dollars, 
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 use surgery
treatment
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people
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 need to pay hundreds of dollars. Apart from
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, some
people
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 who live in an isolated area far from hospital facilities hardly reach
treatment
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 from a doctor. They prefer to treat themselves with alternative
medicine
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 because
people
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 can do it by themself. Take, if
people
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 have an obesity problem, can implement some yoga or a healthy diet without the need to do liposuction in the hospital.
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,
people
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 who experienced using alternative methods believed there are no side effects for the human body.  A good example is someone who has stomach acid disease needs to consume various
medicine
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 before eating, which can be dangerous for their healthy kidneys.
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, if
people
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 like that consistent with doing Tai chi
treatment
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 and drinking herbal tea, they don't need to worry about the side effect. I strongly believe that
people
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 implementing alternative
medicine
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 and conventional
medicine
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 should coexist. They have different strengths that can help many
people
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,
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 because every human body sometimes has different reactions to
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. It can make many offering to
people
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 medicate their paint.
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