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Becasue many children are not able to learm foreign languages,schools should not force to learn foreign language.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
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 present time,
language
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 barriers are playing a significant role in the whole world. In
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 global world not only
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,
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 but
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 many
people
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 are not able to speak and to learn different
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 so that
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schools
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 should not force to learn another
language
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. I partially agree with the given statement. To commence, there are
languages
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 important for
students
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 as well as different sectors. There are a plethora of benefits for
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 to learn foreign
languages
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.
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, they can get better job opportunities and earn more money easily outside the country because
people
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 are able to understand
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different kinds of
languages
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.
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, as
people
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 can easily communicate with others, they will not face any problems.
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, a survey was conducted by TOI-Times Of India, many
students
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 have migrated to another country due to their better future and job opportunity are better than their own countries, so they can easily earn more money.
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, there are myriad drawbacks to learning foreign
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.
Schools
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 and universities are not forced to learn foreign
languages
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 because
children
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 have forgotten their native
language
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 as well as culture. Whereas, other
people
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 cannot understand foreign
languages
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.
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, if
students
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 are learning
a new
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a new language
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languages
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 in
schools
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 or universities during that time create a communication problem and make a new issue regarding
languages
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.
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, many
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 are joining their private tuition for learning a new
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 on account
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they do not create
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 in
schools
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. On a concluding note, there are some merit and demerit to learning a foreign
language
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.
Children
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 can easily get
a good jobs
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a good job
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 in other countries but they can defiantly forget their native
language
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 and culture.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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