Many people today find that the cost of attending a university level education is extremely high for students and their family. What are the causes of this situation, and how can government, universities and the students themselves overcome the problem?

Getting high-level education tends to be
prohibitive
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expensive for pupils and their parents. The root of
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issues can be stemmed from three areas of
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, and the answers to
this
problem
also
can be. In
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essay,
number
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of causes and solutions will discussed, respectively, followed by a reasoned conclusion. A lack of state
fund
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funds
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for institutes can be one of the major contributors
for
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higher tuition
fee
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fees
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. If the government subsidy was not enough, it would lead educational organizations to increase the payment to provide necessary
program
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programs
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in which special
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
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and facilities
required
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for training
students
.
For example
, In some engineering major programs,
students
needs
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to conduct
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experiment at
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facility which costs a fortune for universities. In
case
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the case
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of some
students
, it might be difficult to get higher education
due to
lack
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a lack
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of budget and family
issue
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issues
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. Most
of
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young adults tend to be financially dependent on their parents.
However
, if the family had many children, it would be impossible to provide all of
children
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with higher education. One of
ways
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to solve the reduction of state
subsidy
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subsidies
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can be long-term
installment
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or allowance for universities. If there were
necessity
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a necessity
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which lead to
increase
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an increase
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fee
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,
government
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the government
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could provide a special allowance for institutes. By doing so,
University
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the University
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could provide courses without increasing the cost and
also
enhance the opportunity for
students
to take high-level
course
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courses
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. Another way to solve the problem might depend on
students
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the students
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themselves. There are plenty of examples in which many
students
from developing
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countries
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country
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countries
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are taking courses at world raking universities without paying
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single penny. If they passed the application requirements including examinations like
SAT
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the SAT
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, GRE
and
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ect
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etc.
, there would be
higher
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chance to get a fund from any kind of
organizations
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organization
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in terms of scholarship. In summary, the root of funding and financial depend appear to be the main cause.
Co-ordinated
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approaches from government, educational organizations, and figures might moderate the hardness of
this
situation.
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