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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #person’s #culture #character #choice #clothes
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It is a widely-held belief that
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people
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’s
personality
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 and
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culture
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cultures
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 can almost be discussed by their
outfit
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outfits
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. I disagree with
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 matter due to some grounds which will be explained in
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Firstly
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, some
people
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 do not have enough time to pay special attention to their
clothes
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.
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,
although
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 they like to keep up with fashion or be consistent with their tradition, they mostly cannot mind
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clothes
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 they wear due to the lack of time.
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, doctors sometimes would neglect to pay attention to their
outfit
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, provided that there was an emergency case at the hospital as they just want to arrive as soon as possible to cure their patients.
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,
people
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 should not be judged by the
clothes
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 that they wear under diverse circumstances.
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, choices concerning
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is
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 mainly based on individual interest. So, it is not necessarily related to
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people
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’s
culture
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 or temperament.
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,
people
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 who always wear casual or designer
clothes
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 neither express
about
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their traditions nor personality; and it is just about their fondness. Admittedly, there are some
people
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 who believe that clothing is a significant representation of
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people
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’s way of thinking or the
culture
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 they are following.
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, they deem
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 as all-important factors to comment about
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people
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’s personality or talk about their
culture
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.
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, as clothing is closely related to the situation that
people
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 are in, it cannot be a precise factor to talk about others
character
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 or
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culture
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cultures
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. To conclude, it seems logical that judging others’ nature or way of
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 on the
clothes
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 they wear under different circumstances is not an appropriate idea.
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, some
people
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 reckon clothing as an expression of individuality and lifestyle.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • garments
  • traditional attire
  • sartorial choices
  • expressive style
  • cultural identity
  • psychological implications
  • non-verbal cues
  • globalization
  • perceptions
  • professional demeanor
  • societal norms
  • economic constraints
  • subcultures
  • fashion movements
  • individualism
  • stereotype
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