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Success is often measured by wealth and material belongings. Do you think wealth is the best measure o success? What makes a successul person?

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Becoming successful is evaluated by
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money and other belongings. In my opinion, it is possible for
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 to be successful with mental belongings
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 these are not the best measure of success.
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 having fortune brings achievement to a lot of
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, it does not necessarily follow that
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 without wealth are,
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, unsuccessful.
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, success is subjective and differs from
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 to
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, is not quantifiable. Take
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 the comparison between a football player, playing in a Championship is a way to be successful whereas, for a student working hard and scoring a grade ‘A’ is successful. One way that
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 can gain happiness is through their work. An average earning
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 may be happy if he is working in his passionate profession, but it can not be the same with the
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 earning more and not being happy.
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, it is clear that money can not be a measure to track an individual`s success rate.
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, according to me, the definition of
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person
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 is based on individuals and their perspective towards life. If
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 were able to follow their dreams and
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 in one`s life, they can be definitely considered successful in terms of happiness. In conclusion, wealth is not essential for
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, which can be found through job satisfaction as well as family. The successful is
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 expressed through happiness, achieving high performance in the job, and making
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