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More and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering, computing and medicine. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement of such people, rich countries are stealing from poor countries. Others feel that this is only part of the natural movement of workers around the world. Do you agree or disagree?

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The supplied pie charts highlight the information with regard to the average household expenses in a country in the years 1950 and 2010. According to the chart, we can observe that housing expenditures were the most common among the local population in 1950. A more detailed look at the
first
 pie chart affords to infer that an ordinary citizen spends 72.1% of his annual budget on housing items.
However
, figures on
such
 an area have incurred changes throughout the 60-year period and expenses on housing things are composed of 22% by the year of 2010. At the same time, it can be spotted that society has embarked to spend a total of money on food. Indeed, it can be concluded from the graph that expenditures in the food sector have been rising substantially from 11.2% to 34% during the representative period.
Also
 noteworthy is an increase in expenses in the transportation area and figures have risen from just over 3% to 14%.
Thus
, the growth consists of four times. Ultimately, it can be spotted from the pie charts that the population has distributed their expenditures in various areas evenly during the 60 years.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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