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These days huge portions of population are moving from rural areas to urban areas. Do you think it is a positive or a negative trend?

#portions #population #areas #trend
Personages, in
this
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, are having a hard time
to come
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 to
consensus
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 on whether relocating from rural to
cities
 and towns is fruitful or disastrous. Personally, I am of the opinion that
this
 is an adverse movement and
this
 essay will elucidate the reasons for my slant. One of the chief
aspect
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 that leads to my stance of relocating to big
cities
 being a dreadful scenario is that it soars the crime rate significantly. What it means is,
although
 some of the people
gets
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 benefits
but
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many cannot acquire a good and stable job. As
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as
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 result,
the
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unemployed people engage in crimes
such
 as kidnapping, smuggling, murder, blackmailing, and other illegal activities. Another Crux in favour of it is
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decline
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the decline
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 in crops and food production because of the mass shifting of population from agriculture to industries. To put it another way, folks working
on
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 agriculture move to
cities
 and obviously most of them starts working in industries or other sectors.
This
 transformation leads to the labour shortage in agriculture
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hence
 decrease in food production affecting everyone. A
further
 delineation can be environmental degradation. Precisely, people flocking to the
cities
 in
massess
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masses
 results in overcrowding that increases the usage of vehicles.
Thus
, the volume of toxic gases
release
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 increases simultaneously with
this
 increasing number of vehicles on the road.
In addition
 to
this
 air pollution, it
also
 contributes to the raise of noise pollution, thereby causing
disasstrous
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disastrous
affects
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 like
disrtress
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distress
 in human lives, climate change and acid rains. After perusing the above discussion, it is evident that though resettling in civic may be beneficial at some point,
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I believe in
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the long
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 run, it is
downright
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the downright
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 parlous course for both individual and society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • migration
  • urbanization
  • positive trend
  • negative trend
  • economic opportunities
  • infrastructure
  • services
  • standard of living
  • overcrowding
  • strained resources
  • pollution
  • environmental problems
  • rural livelihoods
  • culture
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