These days huge portions of population are moving from rural areas to urban areas. Do you think it is a positive or a negative trend?

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on whether relocating from rural to
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and towns is fruitful or disastrous. Personally, I am of the opinion that
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that leads to my stance of relocating to big
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being a dreadful scenario is that it soars the crime rate significantly. What it means is,
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some of the people
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many cannot acquire a good and stable job. As
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unemployed people engage in crimes
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in crops and food production because of the mass shifting of population from agriculture to industries. To put it another way, folks working
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agriculture move to
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and obviously most of them starts working in industries or other sectors.
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decrease in food production affecting everyone. A
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delineation can be environmental degradation. Precisely, people flocking to the
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results in overcrowding that increases the usage of vehicles.
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, the volume of toxic gases
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increases simultaneously with
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increasing number of vehicles on the road.
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air pollution, it
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in human lives, climate change and acid rains. After perusing the above discussion, it is evident that though resettling in civic may be beneficial at some point,
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run, it is
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parlous course for both individual and society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • migration
  • urbanization
  • positive trend
  • negative trend
  • economic opportunities
  • infrastructure
  • services
  • standard of living
  • overcrowding
  • strained resources
  • pollution
  • environmental problems
  • rural livelihoods
  • culture
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