Social media enable people to keep in touch with each other and learn about news events. Do advantages outweigh disadvantages?

In the modern
world
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social
media
is an inevitable factor. It connects
people
with each other and
know
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about
on time
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news flash and incidents.
Eventhough
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, in my point of
view
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there are more negative sides than positive as will be now discussed.
To begin
with benefits, the social web has
high
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contribution in communication nowadays when compared to
past
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.
For example
, before
people
communicate only through letters and telephone calls if they were in
far
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distance but these days it is very easy to stay in touch with friends and family by social
media
platforms like
whatsapp
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WhatsApp
Whatsapp
,
messanger
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messenger
and
wechat
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WeChat
.
Furthermore
,
currently
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the editorials are
easly
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easily
available through
you tube
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youtube
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,
twitter
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and all. Now,
people
can watch and discover every news instant and express their own opinions and commands
infront
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in front
of the public. Despite these, the social network
have
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prominent
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role in damaging
of
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youth
mind
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to criminal situations.
For instance
, presently society is addicted to internet-based social networking. They are keen to watch adventures as well as crime stories and follow the same in the real life. Mostly,
the
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social
media
such
as
facebook
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and
instagram
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Instagram
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provides
such
videos and young
people
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the same to catch up others attention.
This
will
ended
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in death or murder.
Moreover
,
people
are very interested to take selfies and upload
in
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social
media
. For
that
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they are choosing some weird situations and results
to
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danger.
Also
now in
family
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the family
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, members
not
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have time to speak
each
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other because they are spending more time
in
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the social webs.
Hence
, they
losing
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family respect and warm relationships. In conclusion,
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social networks are influencing
lifestyle
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of society a lot.
People
are misusing these advancements results in consequences.
However
, When used in a charitable way, it can do good for society.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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