The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts show the
sales
made through the Internet for four different retail sectors, namely travel, films and music, books, and clothes in 2003 and 2013.
Overall
, none of the categories had a dominant position in internet shopping in either year, as their share of online
sales
each
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was invariably below
two fifths
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two-fifths
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. Still, books,
and
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films and music grew in popularity among online consumers,
while
travel and clothes became less attractive. In 2003, travel accounted for the largest percentage of online
sales
at 36%, followed by clothes at 24%.
However
, their numbers declined to 29% and 16% respectively in 2013.
By comparison
, the online
sales
of films and music rose by more than half, from 21% of the total in 2003 to 33% in 2013, the highest percentage of any retail sector. A smaller increase took place in the share of books, up by less than
one sixth
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one-sixth
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from 19% in 2003 to 22% in 2013.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Retail sectors
  • Online shopping sales
  • Market share
  • E-commerce
  • Growth trend
  • Significant change/increase/decrease
  • Percentage points
  • Consumer behavior
  • Shopping patterns
  • Revenue
  • Electronic goods
  • Clothing and footwear
  • Health and beauty products
  • Digital downloading
  • Leisure and personal goods
  • Sector analysis
  • Year-over-year comparison
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