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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. -explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months - say how your work could be done while you are away - ask for his/her help in arranging it

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Dear
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 Smith, I am always thankful for all the support you have shown me in the past five years of my employment
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 Samsung company. I am writing
this
 letter to notify you about the new position that I am going to take in England. As you are aware, The CEO of the company,
Mr.
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 Johnny, has decided to
expend
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the
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branches all over Europe. I am so lucky enough to be selected for a head office in England for six months. Meanwhile, my responsibilities will be shared among the colleagues in the manufacturing part. I have written all the tasks that should be done in the coming months, and I provide all the
costumers’
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 contact information to get in touch with them while their orders are sent.
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, I, surely, will allocate some time to control all the tasks which will be done by others.
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 you could provide me
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 information regarding the products in England so I can get prepared before I arrive there. Should you require more information, do not hesitate to contact me. Yours sincerely, Dorna Sadeghi
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