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With the pressures on today’s young people to succeed academically, some people believe that non-academic subjects at school (eg: physical education and cookery) should be removed from the syllabus so that children can concentrate wholly on academic subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Disciplines at school provide basic knowledge for
children
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. Generally, each youngster’s
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 starts from school
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. They are specially organised at the institute to provide literacy and important
life
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skills
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 in various areas of
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. Some people believe that academic
subjects
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 give more success in adulthood in comparison to non-academic
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 and it should be removed from schools extra circular activities .
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 academic achievements are essential I strongly believe that non-academic
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 teach
children
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 crucial
life
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skills
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 and make them healthier and successful. From my point of view that only academic
subjects
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 can bring success to future adults, society can lose the opportunity to raise teenagers in harmony. There is a lot of evidence that non-academic
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 as cookery or physical education have the same impact on
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’s development as academic disciplines are considered to have.
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, physical education helps
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 to strengthen their bodies and increases their strong will and ability to bear difficulties.
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,
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skills
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 as cookery or
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 to sew can develop attentive and creative people.
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, after gaining simple physical talents youngsters become more confident due to obtained practice and experience to live. The other reason non-academic
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 are important is the well-being issue. It is obvious that
children
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 require activities which improve their energy status as physical exercises and active games. If they do not have physical education in schools as a subject, they feel weak and motionless.
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, they become less interested in the study, they get sick often and do not have the ability to resist diseases.
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, society should anticipate demotivated and physically powerless members, who cannot succeed a lot in adulthood because of strength problems or lack of energy. To conclude, school
children
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 should have an opportunity to grow mentally and physically stronger. As it was above mentioned,
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 chance can be given if they have both academic and non-academic
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 to study at schools.
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