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Some people thinks that government should increase tax on unhealthy food to encourage people to start eating healthy. Do you agree or disagree

#people #government #tax #food
In
this
 busy and struggling ,life maintaining energy is important.In some ,
community
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 rising individuals for bad energy and the reasoning is eating
unhealthy
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an unhealthy
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snack
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.I partially agree with
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 statement my agreement discuss in the
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 essay.
To begin
,In nation human life is so busy and they always do their homework or job work or business that the reason they can not maintain them eating
In addition
 individual eat unhealthy for spend the day and surviving the day and
also
 they can not do exercise.So government raising
tax
 on
junk
food
 is good.For ,example those individuals who eat
this
 type of
food
 in their routine
as a result
 of increased
tax
 stop eating unhealthy
food
 and maintain their
health
.
On the other
hand
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 some individuals view is rising
tax
 on
junk
food
 is not a good
idea
as a result
 of the fact that In nation live many rich people they can not stop eating
this
 type of
food
 for the reason of higher
tax
as a result
 for the time is more important so they spend more money for eating.
this
idea
 only affects poor or middle-class people and some any emergency
also
 they eat
junk
food
 for work the reason increasing the
tax
 on
food
 is not the more effective
idea
. In conclusion, It is so important to maintain and care for human
health
 and to maintain
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health
 they need to stop unhealthy
food
.So In my opinion imposing taxes on
junk
food
 is a good
idea
 for human
health
 and for the nation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unhealthy food
  • junk food
  • calorie-dense
  • taxing
  • incentivize
  • manufacturers
  • prohibitively expensive
  • disproportionately
  • low-income households
  • healthcare costs
  • obesity
  • diet-related diseases
  • punitive measures
  • lifestyle choices
  • government intervention
  • food industry
  • economic impact
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