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Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two pie charts describe the information about the contribution of the
economy
 in various enterprises in Turkey in two different
period
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 2000 and 2016, units are measured in percentages. Overall, it can be seen that clearly,
healthcare
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the healthcare
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 and education industries was the same amount of input to the
economy
 during the given
both
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years. According to the graph illustrates, in 2000,
the
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agriculture was the highest contribution of
the
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Turkey's
economy
, with an average of just less than one quarter, in
contrst
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contrast
, in 2016,
this
 sector participation was reduced by 10%. healthcare and education were the same
amount
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 of input, which is 17%. The trade, utilities and transportation had
contibuted
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contributed
 14% in 2000, but in 2016,
this
 was increased by 2%.
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,
the
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construction and manufacturing had 3 and 8 per cent respectively in 2000,
in contrast
, in 2016, it was increased gradually 7 and 4% sequentially. In terms of the government and leisure and hospitality were contributed to the
economy
 in Turkey, with an average of 12 and 17% respectively, but in 2016,
this
 contribution was diminished slightly, which is 3%.
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