Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourisms on local cultures and environmemts?

In the modern
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there are many countries where
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tourism
is well developed. Unfortunately, the significant problems in
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industry are bad
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, pollution
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etc. In my opinion, I believe that
tourism
has merits and demerits, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs. On the one hand, some commentators argue, that
tourists
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influence on the countries that they go to, and I completely agree, since nowadays there are many environmental problems due to
this
fact.
For instance
, in New York, due to the fact, that
tourists
are always
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to go
sighthseeing
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sightseeing
, there are
big
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amount of ecological problems,
such
as air pollution and
garbish
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garnish
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every side.
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reason, why some people think
this
way, is
tourists
` detrimental
behavior
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. Bad
behavior
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could lead to a lot of issues.
For example
, in Moscow, there are many
tourists
from other countries, which show their disgusting relationship and manners to everyone. For these reasons, I do believe that
tourism
has
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effect.
On the other hand
, some of the people believe, that
tourism
has many advantages
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since
tourism
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big part of every country. One of
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merits is profit. The government get a big amount of income from
tourists
.
This
income could go to every sphere.
For example
, the government could send the money to many charity organisations, so they can maintain them.
Moreover
, they can send
this
money to needy people or to the sick. In light of the
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reasons, I strongly believe that in spite of the fact that there are many flaws and advantages,
tourists
should be more polite with everyone and respect every country.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Finally
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