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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway line for very fast trains between cities. Other believes the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give you own opinion

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people believe that spending more money on improving public transportation rather than building new railway lines for fast transportation would be better,
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, in my opinion, constructing train lines would be a much better choice because, it would be much faster, cleaner, cheaper and more convenient.
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, nowadays people are more concerned about their
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 because they want everything quickly and sanitized.
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, Japan is known for its advancements in railways they are always on
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 and never late and can drop you at your destination on
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. There are
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 many advantages like, there are not affected by any weather conditions, traffic jams, it is
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 cost-efficient and the travelling is easy.
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, other public transport can be used for very small distances like 1-2 km like taxis, buses, automobiles etc. they can
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 to reach longer distances, could have traffic jams, cost are higher, mostly unhygienic etc. In my opinion, the government should put their money into railways because they are more convenient rather than in any other public transport system because nowadays
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 all people have their owned two-wheelers or their cars to travel to small distances.
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