Being a celebrity — such as a famous film star or sports personality — brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

As the old saying goes “every publicity is good, even the bad ones”. With the age of
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well known throughout the world?
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, for a celebrity to be successful they have to be talked about. If someone has a problem with staying in the spotlight,
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fame and glamour are not for them. Being followed by paparazzi and being talked badly about
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is simply a part of the job.
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to look at them. So avoiding the spotlight is not favourable for them.
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any other person, they don't have to share everything about their lives. We all have things we would like to keep a secret and the person they have for TV could be simply an act. Fame, glory and the adoration of people can come with a great cost. So be careful when you make the choice if you want to be on the big stage.
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  • Public scrutiny
  • Intrusive
  • Endorsements
  • Sponsorships
  • Financial security
  • High-profile collaborations
  • Social influence
  • Philanthropic efforts
  • Trust issues
  • Mental health challenges
  • Substance abuse
  • Pressures of celebrity
  • Expectations
  • Disconnect from reality
  • Normalcy
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