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Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Lack of sex education and unplanned parenthood are the major factors in why couples or individuals are adamant about
abortion
. In some states in America,
abortion
 is considered illegal due to the fact that the idea of killing an unborn baby is considered a sin.
Therefore
, making the topic controversial as well as numerous people being opposed to the idea.
However
, I strongly believe that
abortion
 should be legal
irregardless
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 of whether it's based on religious or any spiritual beliefs. The Philippines as an example
,
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 has a growing number of unwanted pregnancies at a young age. The country does not teach proper sex education to teenagers.
This
 is due to the fact that teenagers are more sexually active and are susceptible to being parents at a young age. Another reason why individuals lean towards having abortions legal is, they simply cannot financially sustain raising a child under poverty. Given the fact that the Philippines is a
third
 world country, most are not exposed to the knowledge of planned parenthood and proper guidance. Just the thought of not being able to support your child's essential needs is enough for them to not
second
-guess themselves to abort a child. Let alone at a young age being able to support themselves and their children. One's decision to give birth to another should
also
 be the same as another individual's decision to pursue the idea of
abortion
. Democracy shows that it is a person's right whether or not they pursue
abortion
 without being influenced by any religious beliefs.
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