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Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by government and individuals to solve this problem?

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Actually, over the past 20 years the usage of
polyethylene
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 bags,
plastic
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 bottles is increased noticeably. Since the
plastic
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 materials are not decomposed in a short period severe negative impacts are caused to flora and fauna.
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 essay will explore the problem caused and propose some solutions. To commence, the problems touched the atmosphere and mainly marine and terrestrial wildlife. Due to dumping the
waste
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products
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 into the seas and to the territories where the animals could reside nearly 700 species of fauna were harmed; mainly because most of
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them die
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die
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 of starvation by considering the
waste
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prey.
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, as the population
growth
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 very rapidly it is obvious that
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waste
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 dumping is increasing
accordingly
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.
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, the countries with a small territory are inevitably paying a huge amount of money to companies to take the used
products
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 out of borders. Even more, there are some uninhabited islands in the Pacific ocean filled with
plastic
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 trash. To tackle the problem, the government should strict
restriction
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 on using any kinds of
plastic
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 bags or packaging for any
sectors
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sector
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 of shopping.
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,
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biodegradable or organic substitutes could
offered
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 to clients.
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, the investigations need to be directed to companies that collect the
waste
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 from seas and recycle them into
another
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another product
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products
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. The measures,
also
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, could be taken from individuals as teaching the upcoming generation to classify the used
products
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 into categories that can be reused and dump them into
recycle
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 bins. To summarize,
plastic
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 pollution is
the
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 global problem that concerns not only the environment but
also
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a
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humanity too.
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, individuals and the government should work collectively in order to reduce the harm of
plastic
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • plastic pollution
  • wildlife
  • marine life
  • decompose
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • fossil fuels
  • waterways
  • flooding
  • soil
  • groundwater
  • government regulations
  • single-use plastics
  • eco-friendly alternatives
  • plastic consumption
  • recycle
  • dispose of
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