Students are becoming more and more reliant on computers. What are some problems associated with reliance on computer and what are some of the possible solutions

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technology

is growing quickly

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becoming more and more dependent on computers .

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education is made by the use of technology,

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problems

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which I am going to discuss and try to provide possible solutions for the same.

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of all young one's are spending more and more time online either

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or playing games which is promoting a

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sedentary

lifestyle in them, Adding

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further

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social life is suffering as much as

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physical health is.

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problems

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obesity

, depression, underdeveloped social as well as communication skills. For a clear illustration, in a recent

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it's been found out that using any device for 4 hours straight has

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impact on

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and brain leading to

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depression

and other

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problems.

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these detrimental impacts on children can be minimised by the collective efforts of the school, parents, and

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schools can make sports

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part of school's and encourage

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students to adopt a proactive life,

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as society and parents can organise sports events for

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guardiens

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can put restrictions on the use of technology in the home environment to

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human interactions. In,

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all depends on us how we use the resources and to what extent. as

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and provide them with proper

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Students are becoming more and more reliant on computers. What are some problems associated with reliance on computer and what are some of the possible solutions

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Some people believe that giving aid to poorer countries has more negative effects than positive effects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is important for everyone including young people, to save money for their future. What extant do you agree or disagree with tihs statement?

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages? Give reasons…experience.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with the notion that changing one's perspective on stress can lead to a healthier response to life's challenges?” You should give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge to support your response.